Thesis statement: Bullying is wrong because it can cause a person not only physical pain but emotional pain as well. This pain can manifest in various ways including self harm, bullying to other people, or even suicide.
I. Define bullying and effects of
A. Self harm
B. Bullying
C. Suicide
II. What is suicide?
III. Why do bullies bully?
A. Abuse
B. Feeling of abandonment
C. Unresolved childhood issues
D. Mental instability
IV. Self harm can develop into deeper issues
A. Repressed feelings
B. Physical manifestations resulting in ailment
V. Suicide can effect more than the person doing it
A. Father
B. Mother
C. Friends
VI. Cracking down on bullying
VII. Offering more support for people who are being bullied
A. More perceptive school employees
B. A lookout for bully activity
IX. Why bullying is wrong
A. It can cause death either directly or indirectly
X. Conclusion
A. People do not deserve to get bullied
B. Bullying can cause death and deep emotional issues
C. Bullying somebody to suicide is the same as killing them
Excellent points! Do you intend to expand more on point IX? More reasons it is wrong?
ReplyDeleteNice job, Zach. I agree with Mary, expanding on the reasons its wrong is beneficial to point out. Otherwise, excellent points and subpoints. Look forward to reading your final essay.
ReplyDeleteGood points. I think it would be good to expand on the bullies mental state/health. Like how being can affect self worth, confidence, etc.
ReplyDeleteStrong points. I like how you are comparing emotional and physical pain.
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